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It is important that we maintain and protect the beautiful building of the past, even if it is expensive for countries to do so. Do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Part of the population believes that maintaining old buildings in countries should be mandatory,
although
 it could be expensive for governments to do so. I totally agree with that statement not only because it could be used as
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ource of income for cities but
also
 because those buildings can increase youngsters interest in human
history
.
Firstly
, it is important to say that protecting
history
 artefacts should be
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riority to any country;
therefore
, efforts
shoud
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should
 be destinate to protect and restore buildings that
represents
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 human
history
.
For instance
, the city council of Buenos Aires in Argentina has preserved the
architeture
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architecture
 of historical buildings in downtown;
hence
, millions of people travel to Argentina each year to see and interact with that colonial atmosphere.
Secondly
, to be surrounded by historical buildings could lead more people to show interest on what had happened before and how life and society
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 organized;
consequently
,
this
 could help children and teenagers to develop curiosity about culture and human
history
.
For example
, an article published by
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Science Magazine in Australia has shown how beneficial it is to involve children with science and culture in their daily routine. They concluded that
this
 can arouse curiosity and keep children more interested in school subjects. To conclude,
although
 it could be expensive, all efforts should be done to protect and maintain historical buildings;
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it could not only be a source of income for cities but it could
also
helps
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 young people to develop
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nterest in culture and school subjects.
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