It is important that we maintain and protect the beautiful building of the past, even if it is expensive for countries to do so. Do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Part of the population believes that maintaining old buildings in countries should be mandatory,
although
it could be expensive for governments to do so. I totally agree with that statement not only because it could be used as
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ource of income for cities but
also
because those buildings can increase youngsters interest in human
history
.
Firstly
, it is important to say that protecting
history
artefacts should be
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riority to any country;
therefore
, efforts
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be destinate to protect and restore buildings that
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human
history
.
For instance
, the city council of Buenos Aires in Argentina has preserved the
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of historical buildings in downtown;
hence
, millions of people travel to Argentina each year to see and interact with that colonial atmosphere.
Secondly
, to be surrounded by historical buildings could lead more people to show interest on what had happened before and how life and society
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organized;
consequently
,
this
could help children and teenagers to develop curiosity about culture and human
history
.
For example
, an article published by
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Science Magazine in Australia has shown how beneficial it is to involve children with science and culture in their daily routine. They concluded that
this
can arouse curiosity and keep children more interested in school subjects. To conclude,
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it could be expensive, all efforts should be done to protect and maintain historical buildings;
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it could not only be a source of income for cities but it could
also
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young people to develop
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nterest in culture and school subjects.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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