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As countries have developed there has been a trend towards smaller family sizes. Why does this happen? How does this affect society?

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Many countries around the world are becoming richer as they develop while at the same time they are seeing a shrink in the size of the family unit.
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 pattern has been continued for yonks and it has both positive and negative influence on civilization.
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rend including easy availability of birth control and seriousness towards career-oriented thinking. The major principal reason is, birth control or contraceptive pills are easily available as the nation gets richer.
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, people have awareness and money to afford it.
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, due to the uprising industrial world, the competition for jobs has been increased, which lead to more thoughtful career planning, late marriage and late children.
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, well-developed country Germany holds a record of the late average marriage age,
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 can impact on society in a number of ways. One major positive effect is less poverty, as population fall, the government can fairly allocate scarce resources. A typical example, Canada, where the government is responsible for all medical expenses, no matter a citizen belongs to the rich or low-income group.
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, fewer offsprings, that means parents can focus more on their kids' needs and give them more attention, which may result in responsible and well-aware citizen.
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, the same trend may jeopardise the future workforce as there will be less young people for the workforce in future. To conclude, family size has been fallen due to birth control and education in the developed nations, and
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 has a mixed impact on society. Regardless of the impact,
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 helps a nation to thrive and create a strong economy.
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