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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Most of the countries
offer
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 free
health
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 services but they do not
offer
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 the most expensive latest medical treatments.
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, I believe that the
health
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system
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 should be advanced and free of cost to the people.
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, there are many countries who
offer
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health
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 care
system
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 facilities but with
insurance
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. As part of
insurance
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 is quite expensive, which is unaffordable by everyone. If someone's family won't able to buy the
insurance
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 for themselves or their family member than it's going to trouble them in future. Because in certain countries doctor's does not pay attention to the patient as the national
system
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 allowed.
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, the USA is one of the countries, where to buy
insurance
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 is a must for everyone. But I haven't seen any free medical services they typically
offer
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 to the public
instead
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 of normal
health
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 checkup.
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 the country
system
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 is well advanced and more technical.
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, many countries, who
offer
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 free
health
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 services and medicines, they might have a poor
health
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system
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 in serving facilities.
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, in India, there is plenty of well-being centre's running their free services,
instead
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 of having a poor
health
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system
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.
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, families are own responsible to buy their own
insurance
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 or either
this
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 is not necessary from the government end. So, what are the big advantages of having a free
health
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 service, if it's not going to benefit the person, who is struggling with his own life for the illness? Inconclusion, If normal
health
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 services being offered by the government for free
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 the administration suppose to make some urgent steps to improve the structure and
also
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 make it easier and modest for the people to get the advantages from out of these facilities.
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