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Some people think books are losing importance as a source of information and entertainment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The way we entertain ourselves has changed over the
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 100 years. Nowadays, we often choose to watch TV or use
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 rather than to read, which is often considered more fulfilling, despite its lack of popularity. Improvements in
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 and the
internet
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 are just some of the reasons why
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 change has occurred. On the one hand, there are many reasons why people believe that books are going to disappear.
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, many teachers teach their lessons on or using modern
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instead
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 of
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books.
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, it is much more common for teachers to use projectors with a computer rather than books and a black or whiteboard.
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 is because it is faster, more convenient and allows teachers to teach more subjects in a shorter space of time.
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, the
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 contains a lot more
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 and ideas than books. A search for something in a library might find a book or two, while the same search on the
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 would discover thousands of websites. Another important consideration is the effect printing books has on the environment. Using the
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 or school
technology
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 is much better for the environment because it doesn’t waste trees. By choosing
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 as our source of
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, we might reduce the number of trees being wasted every year.
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, the importance of books as entertainment or
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 should not be underestimated. The
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, as mentioned above, is often considered unreliable simply due to the fact that anybody can publish anything. Books,
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, must be checked and proofread before being published, and so can generally be deemed more reliable and trustworthy. It is clear that the
internet
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 and
technology
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 are simpler and more convenient as sources of
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 and entertainment than reading books, and can
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 provide more reliable
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. In conclusion, I completely agree that books are not so important anymore and I predict that soon everyone in the world will use the
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 as their number one source of
information
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 and entertainment.

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