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Many high street shops have gone out of business in recent years. Why do you think this has happened? Is it a positive or negative development?

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An increasing number of physical stores are closing in nowadays. I think online shopping is the main reason cause
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. In my opinion, high street shops are disappearing because a large number of consumers have chosen online shopping, which provides them with
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aster, cheaper and convenient shopping experience. Online stores allow customers to search for best deals, make purchases from the comfort of their home, and receive their purchased items in within few days. It is impossible for traditional brick-and-mortar stores to compete with the range of choice that can be found online.
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, I recently used the website Amazon to buy some fairly rare academic textbooks that were not stocked at my local bookshop. As a customer, I can find any product imaginable online makes it almost pointless for me to make a trip to my local high street.
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. It is an effective solution for busy people or those who cannot leave the house. In comparison to brick-and-mortar stores with fixed hours, online shopping venues are available any time, day or night.
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, working people can purchase groceries online
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any time, which can help them save a lot of time. Despite
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 causes rising unemployment. As many online shops just require a few staff to manage
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usiness, and many occupations
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 of the economy. In conclusion, online shopping is the majority reason cause fewer physical stores existence.
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