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In future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their country and do not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

There is an opinion that shortly, many people will prefer to go on a vacation in their home
country
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 rather than
travel
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 abroad. I disagree with
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 viewpoint as I think in the future, the
cost
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 of travelling abroad might significantly decrease and
visa
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 procedures could become easier.
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 every
country
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 has many exquisite locations, it is foreign tourist destinations that might soon become cheaper.
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 is because as compared to the past, with the rise in the number of aeroplanes companies there has been a significant decrease in flight ticket rates, which means that the
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 of travelling to an international destination is almost same as the
cost
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 of travelling to a domestic destination.
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, people might find it cheaper to
travel
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 abroad and explore different climatic conditions rather than to holiday in the same climatic conditions in their home
country
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.
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, a flight ticket from Mumbai to Darjeeling
cost
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 approximately INR 5000, and that of Mumbai to Dubai is INR 7000, and
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 difference will
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 reduce in the future. Yet another reason why people will choose to
travel
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 abroad on holiday is that soon
visa
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 procedures will become easier than it is now. With the advancement of technology and growing diplomatic ties between countries, more and more countries now offer
visa
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 on arrival to certain nationality passport holders.
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, more people may find travelling abroad on holiday hassle-free and quicker.
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, tourists often get to experience the varied culture, heritage and hospitality when travelling to foreign countries
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 of holidaying in their own
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’s tourist locations. To illustrate, 58 countries now offer
visa
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 on arrival to Indian nationality passport holders, and
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 number of countries offering
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visa
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 benefits will probably rise in the future. In conclusion, I disagree with the opinion that more people will choose to go on a trip in their own
country
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 over the alternative of going abroad because soon the transport rates between domestic
travel
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 and international
travel
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 might decrease
further
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, and
visa
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 procedures may become swifter.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • local businesses
  • comfort zone
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