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Some people think that it is good for a country's culture to import foreign movies and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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World become a global village.
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country
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countries
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culture
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roup believe that foreign movies and television shows can help to improve
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ountry's
culture
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her side, several groups think local production would be great than import. To commence with, movies and serials have the flash of
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articular
country
. Even though
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 any
person
 never visited that
country
, can feel the
culture
 and behaviours about that
country
.
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, most American popular movies are mostly scientifically and out of box thinking. They inspire many pupils to grow in science and think
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different way.
Furthermore
, the fusion of different
culture
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 of the famous
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 Nicola tesla says that to become great man, adapt and take good things from every
culture
 and ignore another side. The same idea followed by movies and television for
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ountry future. On other hand, the local movie is a mirror of the national issue and progress. Several people are disconnect with
country
 values,truly reconnect them, the
person
 should have deep knowledge about that.
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ational army true story that 30 army
person
 fought with 10,000 people, even though the high command said to back off. That movie inspired numerous people of
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ountry. To recapitulate, As per my point of view, the mixed
culture
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each other. The best way is
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overnment should allow outside shows and support the local cinema business to entertain the people. That would help
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ountry's
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 became reach on superior spots.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural exchange
  • enriches
  • diverse perspectives
  • storytelling methods
  • spur creativity
  • innovation
  • genres
  • styles
  • over-reliance
  • undermine
  • overshadow
  • cultural homogenization
  • national identity
  • local talent
  • linguistic relevance
  • relatable
  • accessible
  • domestic audience
  • preserve
  • cultural identity
  • promote
  • balanced approach
  • cultural landscape
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