You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain the important event apologies for the situation suggest a new arrangement

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Dear John, Hope

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letter finds you in good health and best of spirits. I am writing

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letter to inform you that I can't visit Canada on the 24th of November

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an important occasion with my relatives. I apologize for not coming on the decided date as I

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an invitation to my cousin's brother's wedding. He is my maternal uncle's son and we all have a great bond together. It's essential to attend the event and perform

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rituals that a brother performs at a brother's wedding. On the 23rd of November, I will leave for Delhi from Chandigarh to attend the lady sangeet, which is in late the evening and, the wedding is on the 24th of November. Admittedly, I was extremely excited to meet you and have fun with you.

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soon, I will reschedule my arrival date and let you know. I am so thrilled to see the serene beauty of Canada. Once again apology for disappointing you. Regards, Devin Keith

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task response

Provide a clearer explanation of the important event and its significance to convey the importance more effectively.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that the greeting and closing are more personalized to strengthen the emotional connection with the recipient.

lexical resource

Expand your range of vocabulary to express the explanation and apology more effectively.

grammatical range

Use a wider range of complex sentence structures to demonstrate greater grammatical range.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

172 words

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