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Fast food is now universally in most countries and is becoming increasingly popular. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. What are your opinions in this?

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Every minute world is changing and it's growing huge. As day follows night and
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 every chance has both effects. As per the topic easy to consume
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's ratio is increasing. In my view
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ood impact.
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it carries with it few drawbacks.
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the same subject. The human is getting busy in making their career and running around the clock to chase it. In
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they tend to forget or rather they ignore their health and skip meals or they start having meals once a day. when questioned them about the current situation the only reason which they give is not having sufficient time for making the
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. Due to
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ew business tactics which have been proved successful in the long run. The proposal is nothing but to make life simpler for
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orking class. Have we have more working people in our country. Canned
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 is very convenient to make consume and it avoids the entire process of cooking and additional process with it. Its easily available in every corner of the street and very less price pay.
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it carries the burden of being very unhealthy and nasty for the body. Which people generally forget and keeps intaking it until they reach a certain point where they need medical attention. Processed
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 is quick but it creates enormous problems which can be difficult to attend later. To conclude, In my view
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anything thing which is excess creates
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 imbalance. So, we should be taking care of the quantity in which we consume.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Processed foods
  • Nutritional value
  • Chronic diseases
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Economic impact
  • Job creation
  • Environmental degradation
  • Sustainability
  • Dietary habits
  • Consumerism
  • Mass production
  • Public health
  • Health-conscious
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