16. in some countries, the number of people who visit art galleries is declining. What are the reasons for this? How can we solve this problem.

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16. in some countries, the number of people who visit art galleries is declining. What are the reasons for this? How can we solve this problem.

Fully explain your ideas

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. In some countries, only few young people go to classical music concerts or or play classical music. Why? Should young people be encouraged to attend and learn more? You should write at least 250 words.

You have just spent a week with a friend on holiday. When you got home, you realized you had left your wallet there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Thank your friend for the holiday Explain that you left your wallet in their house Give them instructions of how to send it back to you

Today many people frequently change their jobs. What problems does it create? How to solve them?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?