Opinion Essay: to what extent do you agree or disagree? Some people say that technologies such as mobile phones are disrupting social interaction.

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It is considered by some that smart and
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technologies are making social interaction destroying, whereas others oppose it. From my point of view,
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there is a kind of social distance between people using technologies, I do believe that
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using a phone and
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gadgets is essential as social as well. There is no doubt that the new era of telecommunications began, the live interaction between people has been decreasing.
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means that people became more distant to each other and prefer
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communicate by phones.
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, in Japan people live in a high-quality technological environment, they spend a lot of time using gadgets. They have a lack of live conversation and understanding themselves by other people,
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the government established booths where was sitting people, who can listen and talk with citizens. Around
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kind of booths was
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arge crowd of people who wanted to
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.
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,
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technologies as mobile phone helped people to be closer to each other. There is
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can be a type of social
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, but not face to face.
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is mainly due to the fact, that many of phones, computers, laptops and other have a camera and internet connection, that helps to organize video-conversations between two or more people.
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, you or your relatives can be in different places of a planet and continuing interacts with each other,
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is a very meaningful thing too. To sum up, I personally agree, that technologies are disrupting social interaction in the mental plane.
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, I cannot deny that there are benefits from gadgets saving the
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between people and we need to take it into account as well.
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