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Most people do not care enough about environmental issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #care
The maps below illustrate how the
city
 of Langley changed between the years of 1910 and 1950. Overall, the
city
 became more structured and tidy, where the railway line on the suburb was removed in 1950. In
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est of the
city
, there were two rows of townhouses on
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both sides of the Jordan street,
however
, they were reconstructed on only one side into wider and higher plats in 1950. There was a large wasted spaced on the north town,
besides
 which a factory to produce coals
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 in 1910. When came to 1950, that place was reused to construct three high buildings for
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usiness function. There were
also
 some shops which are opened to offer services for local people in 1950,
such
 as laundry shops and cafés, which were originally built at opposite sides of Sherman street. Removing the cottages for railway workers, people had three stores on the southeast corner of the
city
 and opposite to them across the New Lane, there was a Sherman Park with the pool children's play area to replace the precious wasteland.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prioritize
  • immediate needs
  • connect with
  • distant
  • abstract
  • economic considerations
  • growing awareness
  • active participation
  • initiatives
  • movements
  • impacts
  • well-being
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