Children today have more responsibilities than the past. Some people think it has positive effects than negative ones while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays youngsters have additional responsibilities compared to
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ast. Some argued that it has a positive development rather than
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egative outcome and others think the opposite. In my opinion
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it of both throughout
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odern world
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children have been more responsible than past have a good outcome because it
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them to be independent. In many countries by age of 15 or 16 young adults have part-time jobs to
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most of their needs. So they don’t have to depend on
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arents.
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society will have self-confident adults.
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ery young age and with his experiences opened his own café when he was 23.
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, young adults been extra responsible has a positive growth because it helps them to be self-standing adults in the future.
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ery young stage have negative development since it might affect their mental health.
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decades back we have
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reedom to enjoy our childhood to the fullest. We did not take any authority when we were young. But these days because of not having a proper childhood experience young generation suffering from depression and other mental health issues.
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, a survey done in London University found out that 75%
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children suffering from various mental disease due to not having better boyhood/girlhood.
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arly age have negative growth as it
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little ones physiological health. To sum up, even though young adults growing up with many responsibilities have some positive effect
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ater stage of their lives.
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