Some people think that school should no longer be necessary because children can get information from the Internet.

There are two groups of people where one believes that there is no needing in
school
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
because children can receive all data from the
Internet
sources, whereas others oppose it claiming that academy education is the one of
s
Add an article
a
the
show examples
ignificant part of every person. From my point of view,
although
we can get all needed information from the
internet
, I do believe that
school
is essential for human being as well. There is no doubt that the new era of technologies and developments of
Internet
connection
provide
Change the verb form
provides
show examples
all data that needed to us.
This
means that people shouldn’t recognize all of
i
Add an article
the
show examples
nformation about some subjects or topics, we can find it in
internet
sources and solve the problem and we don’t need to spend our time on
school
education.
For example
, today
such
companies as Google and Yandex create translators that based on artificial intelligence,
therefore
we can translate our speech or text into another language and there is no need to teach the languages of other countries.
Moreover
,
in
Change the preposition
on
show examples
the
internet
, there are many types of calculators to solve the tasks from math, physics or chemistry.
On the other hand
,
such
things made people sillier and we can lose our intellectual skills.
This
is mainly due to the fact of digitalization of all professions spheres.
As a result
, people became lazier, and we should use our brains to remember and analyze the given data given to us. Another solid argument has to do with
a
Change the article
the
show examples
mental health of children who will learn via
i
Add an article
the
show examples
nternet. The academy is a little world, where’s going to prepare children to adult life. In
the
Remove the article
apply
show examples
school
, you can meet with failures and winnings that will help you to understand the real world behind the walls of the
school
. To sum up, I personally agree that the
Internet
is vital for getting information
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
because it is as a big encyclopedia.
However
, I cannot deny that
school
is necessary for making our brains work and prepare us to the real world;
therefore
we need to take into account as well.
Submitted by kartoseckam on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: