Some cities create extra housing by building tall buildings. Other cities do this by building on wide areas of land. Which do you think is the best solution to the problem of housing?

While some cities prefer to build tall houses, others create buildings by doing it on wide areas of
land
. Personally, I opine that the high-rise building should be preferred since
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can preserve nearby
land
for other uses and spend less
time
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daily trips. Today’s cities grow rapidly and require more
land
for new buildings and infrastructure.
This
is because a large number of people prefer
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stay
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in megacities due to opportunity and facilities,
such
as education ,work and entertainments provided by
such
places. By building more skyscrapers, the surrounding area can be preserved or used in another way.
For instance
, pristine natural lands can be designated as national parks or if the city requires more food to feed its population, there could be proximately located farms with fast delivery times .To illustrate, there is a gripping National Park in the New York
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among a huge number of high-rise buildings. Another point to consider is that tall buildings usually concentrated in city centres with well-developed public transport.
This
gives citizens a golden opportunity to save their
time
for habitual
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and
this
is the key to
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ore convenient life. If it were not high-rise houses with more numbers of
appartments
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apartments
, less number of people would
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afford
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live with better conditions,
such
as common transport for saving their
time
. According to London Researching Group in University, average European citizen, who lives in remote areas with wide houses, spend three hours per day for
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rip to work and to back home. In conclusion, I am convinced that the best solution to the problem of housing is building tall buildings.
This
is because not only preserve nearby
land
for other uses
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but
also
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give
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an opportunity to saving people’s
time
.
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