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Most people prefer ready to eat food outside of their home rather than homemade food now. Do you think this has more advantages or more disadvantages?

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Readymade foodstuff is becoming a trend these days than home-cooked
food
. More people prefer to consume a precooked meal in stores. I believe
this
 has more drawbacks than benefits. Throughout
this
 essay,I will explain how disadvantages outweigh advantages. In our day-to-day busy life ready to eat meals is a better option because it is more convenient and available in many stores. Most of the people do not have enough
time
 for cooking with their daily schedule. People tend to grab a quick meal from the store and fulfil their hunger become the easiest thing.
On the other hand
,these pre-cooked meals are cheaper most of the
time
. They are available in many varieties. Rather than cooking rice and curry at home for
next
 day lunch, it is cheaper to buy readymade rice and
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hicken portion from Aldi just for $3, A survey done in France found out 75% of people prefer to consume outside
food
 than home-cooked
food
 because it is cheaper.
On the other hand
,there are more negative impacts of fast
food
 but two major points been lack of nutritional value and various health issues. It is obvious those readymade meals are lack of nutritional value because those
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 have been highly processed. At the same
time
,it contains more preservatives to keep
food
 longer in stores and to maintain the freshness of meals. Consuming pre-made meal for a long
time
 can lead to various health issues
such
 as diabetic, high blood pressure and cholesterol. An article published in Canada found out that 75% of people suffering from different health issues by having pre-cooked meals frequently. To sum up, though there are few benefits of taking readymade cuisine from outside it can have an adverse impact on humans because of fewer nutrients on fast meal and major sickness issues arising from it.
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