Many people believe that increasing levels of violence on television and in films is having a direct result on levels of violence in society. Others claim that violence in society is the result of more fundamental social problems such as unemployment. How much do you think society is affected by violence in the media?

Some people argue that there are increasing
violence
problems happened due to bad actions and examples shown on TV.
However
, others believe that
this
is caused directly by basic social problems,
such
as loss of jobs or medical cares. I really think that these two reasons make influences on
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ssue, whereas, they play different roles. It is certainly the case that incidents of
violence
can mislead some people and intrigue their
disers
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users
to commit a crime, especially for children. Due to lack of self-control ability, some murder plots in films could lead children to imitate actors'
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, which increases the possibility of teenagers' crimes and adds up their
violence
sence
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since
. There are lots of drunker who broke beer bottles to threaten others, which a situation that people always can learn from TV and films.
However
, I don't hold the view that
this
is the major
reason
of
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social
violences
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, for that it is only a small trigger to influence people's sense. The deepest
reason
of
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social
violence
problems is unbalanced and unequal resources that are distributed in the whole society. If people are full of money, they can have
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ower to control or scrab much more
resourses
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resources
or opportunities than poor people. They can pay for them to hire slaves to do services for them and even form an unequal social status, which is
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main
reason
for the rise of
violence
In America,
for example
, there are continuous
violence
incidents of black American to fight for their own work opportunities and equal social status to enjoy medical cares. All these kinds of violent events are the result of basic social problems caused by unbalanced and unequal social wealth or resources. To sum up, it is indeed a fact that some bad examples or crimes in films can cause many imitations in real society, especially for teenagers,
however
, the basic
reason
arousing some violent problems is basic social problems, like unemployment, caused by
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nbalanced distribution of social resources.
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