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Studies have shown that in many countries the income gap between the rich and poor is ever increasing. What problems can arise from this situation and what could be done to address this situation?

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There is no doubt that the gap present clearly today between the poor and the rich is getting wider by time and is affecting our way of life. That was only observed in the past in some communities where the wealth of a country was restricted to a few powerful and connected people. They used to own more than eighty
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 of the resources and income, while the rest is barely enough for the common people. Nowadays, the difference is significant but not limited to the societies finest. The society is divided into groups, the rich, the poor and the few managing to enjoy some of the rich benefits but struggling to keep
this
 level, they are bouncing between the limits of each of the other groups.
As a result
 of today's situation, a broadband of the poor are striving to get a fair share of prosperity with no actual hope, the fabric of the society is getting weaker and
therefore
 each group is more colonised to itself forming new habits and customs. Bridging
this
 gap can only be done if equality was achieved in
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basic needs like education and healthcare. If
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acceptable ease was managed for the common people in their daily routines like public transportations and business facilities, that would
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 be helpful. There must be transparent laws to manage the use of
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wealth and the equality of sharing it and monitor any possible corruption. The sense of equal opportunity has to be delivered and believed by all people. Briefly, no community can prosper and evolve safely unless the gaps are bridged between people
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 all aspects giving a fair chance to everyone to live in comfort if they worked reasonably hard to achieve it.
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