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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages?

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
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Recently, most foods that are bought from superstores or small stores have chemicals in them as they are essential to preserving for a long time.
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, there are concerns that
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 chemicals in
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 have a detrimental impact on our health. According to me,
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 is completely true and the potential danger is severe than advantages. There are numerous reasons why these chemicals are being added to edible
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. The foremost reason is to improve the final product to the eye, which basically works as a marketing strategy to lure more customers.
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, since it looks nice with the use of colouring, it is tempting to eat. Another reason is to preserve for longer period of time. As normal fresh
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, what we eat today might not
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 longer, various companies came up with the solution of adding preservatives in order to get more profit from late expiry
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. So, again
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 is an advantage to firms who sell
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 because it adds more shelf life. From the aforementioned evident points, it is clear that the main benefits are
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 to the companies and not to consumers. Even though
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 added preservatives are claimed as safe to eat though researches, it works as a slow poison in most of the cases.
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,
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 researches are potentially biased, as those are conducted by the same companies who sell
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, or by people, who are connected with them.
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, there have been cases when companies have been banned by the nation’s local
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 quality committee due to harmful chemicals.
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, Nestle Maggie was banned in India due to harmful preservatives used to make. In conclusion, despite the fact that there are benefits of placing chemicals in
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 for extending expire and better view of a product, I believe it principally helps companies and not the consumers but adds danger to the public. It is unlikely that
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 should be stopped, so people can eat
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 without any fear of deleterious effects.
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