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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Advancements in the 4-wheeler-vehicle industry, mainly comprising of cars,
such
 as reducing the
cost
 to own a
car
 and increasing in-
car
 safety measures have made it much easier for an individual to opt-in for a
car
 rather than depending on the public
transport
.
However
,
i
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ncrease in the number of cars, on the road,
cause
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 an alarming rise in the number of traffic jams in the city. Over the years, in efforts to make cars substantially cheaper and safer, engineers and
car
 manufacturers have invested a lot of money to ensure every person can fulfil their dream of owning a
car
. In reality,
however
, it has been noticed that a middle-class person who has, in the past, relied on either public
transport
 or 2-wheelers can now easily own/finance a
car
.
As a result
, since the
last
 decade, city roads face numerous traffic jams on a daily basis while the use of public
transport
 or bikes have reduced drastically. These effects cause more money to the
government
 as additional infrastructure has to be added to the highways and,
increase
 in pollution
also
 has to be countered. To avoid these detrimental changes, the
government
 needs to place strict policies on
car
 production and, takes steps to make public
transport
 appear more compelling to the general public.
For example
, introducing new vehicle taxes will
increase
 the
cost
 to own and maintain a
car
.
This
, on one hand, will bring down the average sales of cars and, on the other, provide the
government
 with additional tax money which can be
further
 used to improve and reduce the
cost
 of public
transport
. In my opinion,
car
 manufacturers are reducing the costs of owning a
car
 year after year and, to counter
this
, the
government
 can introduce taxes to
increase
 the
cost
 of 4-wheelers while
also
 improve on alternatives to a
car
,
such
 as public transportation, bikes and, bicycles.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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