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As well as making money, businesses should also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?

#money #businesses #responsibilities
Nowadays, the enterprise has become more influential in
society
 than before. Base on
such
 a tendency, many people argue that even personal companies need to take social responsibilities apart from earning money. I totally agree with
such
 an opinion and will explain that with relevant examples.
First
, business plays an important role in the daily lives of citizens. From transportation to clothes, these industries which highly relating to the survival of modern lives have been manipulated by some of the companies.
For instance
, people in the present world mostly get food from a particular brand of supermarkets
such
 as Walmart and Carrefour. Those companies must provide reasonable prices for products to maintain the stability of
society
. If chasing profits become the only purpose, there will be chaos around the nations leaving no rooms for a living of individuals.
Second
, since enterprises provide most of the employees across the planet, a businessman must have a sense of responsibility in the community. The jobs rend not only personal incoming for individuals but
also
 tax revenue for the governments, which is essential for the development and maintenance of the
society
. A sudden cutting downing of the staff ignoring social needs could result in a national depression.
For example
, the shunt down of Cathy Dragon cause a great impact on their formal employees as well as the development of the transportation industry in Hong Kong. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the opinion that companies should refer to the requirement of
society
 rather than the only emphasis on making money according to their interest.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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