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Many species of animals have lost their habitats due to human activities over the

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decades. Personally, I completely disagree with the idea that it is a waste of money to protect them. There are several reasons why I believe that money spent on wildlife is not a waste.

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, zoos are good sources of education, especially for children. Young pupils are now able to observe many different types of animals with their own eyes and by touching them. Without the protection provided by zoos and keeping them in safe places, children would only be able to see them in textbooks or on television.

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, human activity has a huge impact on natural habitats, and

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responsible for them. Provided that domestic and industrial waste has been pumped into rivers and seas, and many areas of woodland have been deforested, it has led to enormous numbers of aquatic life and wildlife dying out.

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has interrupted natural cycles and devastated food chains.

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, we should at least try to preserve them no matter what.

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, rainforests are essential for human survival as trees produce oxygen and absorb carbon dioxide. Carbon dioxide

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is detrimental to human as it could kill us.

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, many areas of rainforest are being deforested for industrial reasons, and

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activity will eventually harm us due to a lack of oxygen and the excessive amount of carbon dioxide.

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oxygen that covers almost 70% of the Earth and if we continue to destroy the tress, we might not be able to survive in the future. For the reasons mentioned above, I believe that we humans need to allocate

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resources to protecting wildlife.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

285 words

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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we don't really need. Others say that advertisements tells us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. So, sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

computer and AI technology are increasingly being used for online education Can AI enhance the learning experience? Is this a positive or negative development?

In recent years, “responsible tourists” have paid attention to preserving both culture and environment of the places they visit. However, some people say that it is impossible to be a “responsible tourist”. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Group or team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are done alone. Do you agree or disagree?