Your company has sent you on a three-month course in another country. The course is coming to an end, but you would like to prolong your stay. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter -describe how the course benefited you -explain why you would like to delay your return -suggest a date when you would like to come back.

Dear Sir William I am writing to inform you about the
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I have taken in London. The
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is coming to an end, but I
hope
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to stay longer to take more courses. The
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you sent me to for three
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was really beneficial to me. I learned several things about investment and the rules of the central bank.
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, the teachers were really kind.
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, I would like to stay longer than three
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because I want to learn more about finance. It is interesting to learn it at
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institution; they have
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information about finance, and I
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to learn more about it. I
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to return after two
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because they have an additional
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about investment, and that will end after two
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. I
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you will let me stay longer. I am awaiting your response. Thank you for your consideration. Lolo Ahmed

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Consider adding more specific examples of what you learned during the course. This will strengthen your response.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clear topic sentences to introduce each paragraph. This will help the reader follow your ideas more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear greeting and closing, which is very good.
task achievement
You expressed your desire to learn more, showing your motivation and interest, which is positive.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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