Many believe that the best way to ensure a happier society is to reduce the difference in income earnings between the rich and poor. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Trying to balance the income of the poor and the rich is considered as a method to build a happier society by many people.

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, I don't agree with the above statement. In

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essay, I would give reasons for my disagreement and

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try to list down other measures which yield to a better community. One the one hand, a community is said to be balanced only when all the facilities which are available to the wealthy are

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delivered to the people who are less privileged.

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decreasing the gap between them.

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, essential needs like education, ration,shelter , daily wages etc. are to be made available to the poor people by the Government.

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, national leaders should

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concentrate on removing social barriers.

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, self-confidence in the poor will be raised.

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leading to a well-harboured civilization.

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, if the Government concentrates only on increasing the taxes paid by the prosperous people to maintain a low difference in the wealth of the poor and the rich,

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there may be chances that the rich try to leave the country.

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will be affecting the national income.

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, if the tax on jewels increases, the merchants try to bond and will try to fly into those countries which impose less tax on these items. To conclude, I totally disagree with the statement that decreasing the variation of the incomes between the high-class and the low-class people is the best way to develop a better society.

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also

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tried to give some better methods

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to foresee a happy society.

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