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In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?

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Over the decades, the traditional family structure has experienced significant changes.
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society. Taking look into the past, families used to include in its unit grandparent, parents, children and other members if they are. Nowadays,
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 common nuclear families as many young people move to
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ducation or pursuing career growth.
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, several generations do not live under one roof today.
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, women no longer only play the role of housewife and mother, but
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 a breadwinner. Statistically,
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ercentage of Russian men taking parental live grow every year. As all shifts in social structure, these have its advantages and drawbacks. The older generation, that in the past supposed to help take care of children, now live separately.
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, they might feel isolated and do not get enough help and attention from their family members. For that reason, social services and volunteers ensure elderly people with the necessary care.
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omen role provides more freedom and career prospects, and financial independence. To conclude, I would argue that
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ovement that takes place in family structure and the roles of its members is mainly positive due to the modern lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Family structure
  • Modern family
  • Extended family
  • Nuclear family
  • Same-sex parent families
  • Breadwinner
  • Caregiving responsibilities
  • Family dynamics
  • Globalization
  • Economic shifts
  • Migration
  • Child-free lifestyles
  • Cohabitation
  • Traditional marriage
  • Perceptions
  • Homemaker
  • Communication
  • Shared activities
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