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In the recent years, televisions has contributed the most to changing people’s quality of life. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In
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 modern era, television has revolutionized society’s outlook towards life. Many argue that
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 small screen has influenced society globally, altering people’s quality of life. I agree, that it has drastically impacted people’s life, albeit negatively. In the wake of newer advancements in technology, even televisions have succeeded in reframing how humans interact socially, and it has
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 lead to a decrease in the individual’s efficiency at work.
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 with, many years ago, face-to-face communication was the only recreational activity that our ancestors used to cherish. Unfortunately, which is not the same case now. Most of the adults as well as children have been observed being glued to the television programs which are broadcasted all day through satellites. Having said that, these TV series immensely withhold people from interacting with each other on one to one basis.
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, a survey conducted by the Cambridge School in Britain
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 revealed that 62-68% of young adults are experiencing difficulties in withdrawing their attention from these small screens, as they feel it relieves their tension and anxiety more effectively than talking to friends and neighbours.
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, the same small box can
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 cause detrimental effects on the professionals, particularly those who work from home. People who are attracted to all the documentaries, TV soaps and television series fail to gather adequate concentration towards their tasks. Failure in timely completion of their assignments can not only hamper their professional growth in an organization but will
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 affect their bonuses, increments, and promotions. Alluring images and videos from TV,
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, has distracted more than 70% of job employees in Korea, a case report presented in an International Business forum.
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 negative effects can alter many families
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asic standard of living. To recapitulate, these days
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 forms of visuals and audio entertainments have a profound and harmful impact on society. Indeed, we all require some form of recreational activities to rejuvenate ourselves, so as far as I am concerned,
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 of making Television our companion, won't it be a fruitful thing to become an active member of a community and thrive to improve our quality of living for our
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 generations?
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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