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Band 5.5

You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was servd for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter •say what the participants liked about the hotel •explain why they were unhappy about the food •suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

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Dear Sir/Madam My name is
khashayar
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Khashayar
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 Partovi. I have booked your
hotel
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 for our meeting which was held from Monday to Thursday
last
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 week. I am writing
this
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 letter regarding
to
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apply
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our
participants
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participant's
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 feedback about your services
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 with, our guests were extremely grateful for your hospitality and services offered to them.
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, they were happy for the
hotel
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 because it was located in a cosy location
in
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downtown.
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, the building has an
easily
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 access to public transportation including
subway
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the subway
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.
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 the participants were satisfied
about
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with
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 the
hotel
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,
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However
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however
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, the food served
for
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to
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 them
make
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 them annoyed. The
hotel
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 served a variety of foods but it was not well cooked and when it
deliver
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delivered
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 to our guests in the restaurant it was cold and inappropriate to eat.
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, our guests were unhappy with the food. I am asking you to change your chef and cooking team and replace them with a new cooking team.
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, I recommend that the waiter or waitress deliver the
foods
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food
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 to the customers as soon as it is cooked and
well warmed
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well-warmed
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. Thank you for your reconsideration in advance. Yours sincerely, Khashayar Partovi

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structure
Ensure the letter is structured appropriately with clear paragraphs for different ideas. A separate paragraph for the closure could enhance clarity.
accuracy
It's good practice to re-read the letter to catch typos and grammatical errors, as these can impede understanding and reduce the overall coherence.
practicality
When making suggestions for improvement, try to be specific but realistic; replacing an entire cooking team may not be practical. Offering suggestions like regular quality checks or training in food presentation could be more effective.
tone
Try to maintain a consistent tone throughout your letter. While addressing issues, also ensure politeness and professionalism. This keeps the letter respectful and constructive.
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