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Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. How do you think children should spend their free time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #children #time #school #work
A fraction of the parents
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 their children beyond their
cognivitive
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cognitive
 abilities by forcing them to study in their spare
time
 as well.
This
 essay is in disagree with
this
 scenario and tries to propound some leisure
time
 activities for the juveniles. In
this
 highly competitive world, arguably,
acadamic
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academic
 credentials drive greater importance in making
yonger
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younger
 generations successful to a great extent. Even though,
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 very important for them to take a break from all the hectic situations to be relaxed and energetic.
First
 and foremost, peer groups have a pivotal role in a student's life. They should find
time
 to play any outdoor games with
then
.
This
 in turn makes them physically as well as mentally fit.
Moreover
, they could acquire skill sets like social skills, communication skills,
problem solving
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 skills,
competetive
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competitive
 skills and so on.
Also
, in
this
technology driven
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 world, it has opened many
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 of opportunities for the pupils to sharpen their innate abilities and
also
 it is a blessing for the children who are in pursuit of reading.
For instance
,
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mazon kindle is an e-learning software with millions of books. Pupils no longer have to read on hard copies. They could enjoy their reading on
a simple gadgets
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.
Furthermore
, parents should encourage the children to spend their spare
time
 with family
also
. It not only improves family bonding but his
self esteem
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 as well. Apart from that, for a children family is the key to
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ruitful future. So they could make a better environment for their offsprings to develop their inhibits, or else eventually children become depressed. Nowadays child
psychyatrists
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psychiatrists
 are on increase is an epitome for the parents
unawreness
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unawareness
awareness
 of their child's inhibitions. In short, spending spare
time
 in a useful way is important in children's life. Their today determines how they are going to be in the future. The advantages that acquire from leisure
time
 activities should not be overlooked. Today's children are
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tomorrow's future. So it is important to make their life more qualitative.
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