In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area.What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

Nowadays, many people choose to leave their
and go to
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ig city to stay and work because they think it will help their life better. But it always benefits us or
has disadvantages? In my opinion, I think it has many gains when you live in your
of going to large cities.
, in the small villages, you would know everybody in there and you never had to feel alone. If you have a problem, you will quickly receive help.
has a peaceful and friendly atmosphere so it will make your day better after a busy day. But
on the other hand
, living in small villages
have a lot of weaknesses. Normally, small villages will stay far away with cities which synonym that you would have a little chance to advance in your jobs. And it
hard to find good conditions like the quality of teaching, material facilities, … If you are young people, big cities will be an interesting place with
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entertainment. All in all, I still love staying in my
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there, I will be able to live with the people I love.
, I will go to
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big cities to study and learn more to survive in society.
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