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People have different ways of escaping stress and difficult of modern life. Some read, some exercise, others work in their gardens. What do you think are the reasons for stress? What are the best ways of reducing stress?

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comfortness in human
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there is a new ailment which is increasing
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larming rate in everyone's
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 and it's called
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. There
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n
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umber of ways to deal with it in our laborious
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we will be discussing
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the reasons for
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 and the best ways reducing the same. According to the
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research
 done by the Oxford University
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the major reason for
stress
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work
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life
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ot of their time at
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 to impress their bosses for
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ncrease in their remuneration or promotion that they devalue being social or recreational time. Another reason for
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ncrease in
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 is overthinking,
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employees working in the IT sector are the ones living the most unhealthy lifestyle. Due to their project deadline they
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 for longer hours, continuously keep on
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refining
 their ideas for better deliverables and due
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 which they
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don't
 value physical activity and weight eat. There is
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umber
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 of ways where we can counter
stress
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 effectively and live weight-free
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; like meditation, exercise, being social with friends, family excursions, reading a book, cooking and so on. If people do any activity which they enjoy doing atleat for an hour a day would reduce weight majorly.
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,if someone suffering from
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 contemporary disease, would take a stride in a park for an hour or so would improve not only physically but
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 mentally. In conclusion, dealing with
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 is very imperative in
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today's
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 competitive world as avoiding it may
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 to some serious issues. If one would proper juggle
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work
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life
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 balance and take care of
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 health,
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wont
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be
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 any issue and one will be content in
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