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Government should not give international aid since they have disadvantages people like unemployed and homeless in their own country. Do what you agree or disagree.

#government #aid #people #country
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It is a big concern for many people that it is not the responsibility of their administration to provide international
aid
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 to other Nations owning to the fact that they have some obstacles. I partially agree with
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 statement.
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 with, there are various reasons why the administration should not provide international
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.
first
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 of all, the authority should invest money in their own nation
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 of giving international
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. If unemployment rate high in own country
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 there would not support to ministry supply
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 to other poor countries. Naturally, they expect that
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 on problems should be sorted.
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, the administration should invest money on construction new organisation
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 as factories and health than high chances of developing nation.
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, it helps to control unemployment in the nation. Another thing that any country of government should provide homes and jobs to people rather than lending money to other countries. In
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 way,the economy would be better. if the government has extra funds and
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 it should be used to fulfilling compulsory needs after that it is provided to as international
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 to other nations.
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, people in some parts of the world are starving, many others have opulent resources so sharing among Nations can be better bonding with each other. Rich nations always help to poor Nations the sharing of wealth will eliminate the more pressing problem in poor countries.
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,the richest country the USA invest in a research facility in many Asian countries and in return they have a meritorious a scientist living and work for them. In conclusion, the government should fulfil the needs of their own citizenship.they should share their extra funds to poor countries as international
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 they can be helpful for both countries.
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