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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because consumers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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The bar chart gives information about
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 dollars of
export
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 classes in 2015 and 2016 years in a country and the table shows the percentage of changes in categories between these two years. Overall, petroleum products figure the largest amount of
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 and there is a slight difference between two years, by 2.
On the other hand
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, the textiles category has the lowest
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 quantity in
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 chart. In general, categories are constituted a bit more billions of exports in 2016 according to the 2015 year. The biggest
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 figures with 67
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 in 2016 from petroleum products,
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 engineered goods follow as
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 to
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 statistic with almost the same amount, 66
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.
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 by other categories, gems and jewellery had exported slightly more in 2015, around 53
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 and exports fall by %5 in 2016. Textiles class has the minimum of the
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 amount with 35
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 the most of change between two years, it rose by %15.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic downturns
  • entrepreneurs
  • cultural implications
  • generic
  • identity
  • environmental considerations
  • carbon footprint
  • community interaction
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • promotion of competition
  • innovation
  • local communities
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