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You recently bought a camera while travelling overseas. When you got to your destination you discovered that some important items were missing from the box. Write a letter to the local representative of the company. In your letter give details of the camera and where you bought it explain what has happened say what you want him/her to do about it

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Dear sir, I'm Dheeraj Sudarsanam. I'm writing
this
 letter to bring to your attention about missing items in my latest
camera
box
. On 27th October, in
Melbourne
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the Melbourne
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 Canon store, I bought
latest
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the latest
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 Canon 700D
camera
 with
basic
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a basic
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 50x zoom
lens
 included. I bought that
camera
 when I was on my way to the airport. I carried that
box
 with me in the cabin bag. After coming to the UK, I opened the
camera
box
 and realised the basic 50x zoom
lens
 are missing. The price I paid for the
camera
 is inclusive
with
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 that
lens
.
Hence
, I was boarding
flight
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a flight
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, I didn't get a chance to open the
box
 and check the items. When I found that
lens
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the lens
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 is missing I was so upset because they are highly required for my shooting in the UK. I contacted the store in Melbourne and I got advice to write a letter to a local representative explaining the situation. What I'm expecting is, I want to get that
lens
 from you in any local store. I have receipts and purchased item
number
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 with me, as
a
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apply
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proof of purchase. I hope you will consider my problem and will give a prompt response. Regards Dheeraj
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