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In recent years,more and more people tend to live individually.What are the causes of this trend?Does this have a positive or negative effect on society?

In the modern era, many individuals prefer to live alone because they assume that it would be better to obtain privacy from others and to gain self-confidence. In
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 society. On one hand, these days living by solo would be a trend among young people. The main reason is that they like their own spaces and don’t want to share
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 with someone else. Meanwhile, humans who are going to
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 studies in other countries prefer to live individually.
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 it would help them to develop self-confidence
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 they get the courage to overcome the problems.
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 European countries, many teenagers choose to live single.
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, they can earn more money and spend their time
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.
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, individuals are keen to explore new things, so they choose a free life.
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 has a lot of problems that arise in their life because most
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the
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people like loneliness. It would change their mind badly and it causes depression for them.
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, the family has a substantial role in a person’s life and living with loved ones would change their
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 to an extent.
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, a recent survey found that people who are residing solely
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 are more affected by depression when compared to the past decade. In conclusion, individuals are fascinated
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 alone because they need more privacy from others
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 it would help them to build their self-confidence.
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, it might have some negative effects
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 considering the positives

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planning
Plan your essay before you write. Decide your view and list the main ideas you will use to explain causes and effects.
structure
Use a clear plan: intro, body, and end. Each body paragraph should have one main idea and a short example.
cohesion
Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence. Use linking words to show cause, result, and contrast.
grammar
Check grammar and spell. Use short, clear sentences and common words to avoid mistakes.
content
The topic is clear and you try to show both causes and effects.
structure
There are some examples, and the essay has paragraphs and basic linking.
structure
The writer uses 'On one hand' and 'On the other hand' to show two sides.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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