In the last century when a human astronaut first arrived on the moon he said" it is a big step for mankind" But some people think that it makes little difference to our daily life. To what extend do you agree or dis agree?

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There are many inventions
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were happened in the 20 th
centuary
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century
. While the
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was considered as a big advancement in the field of science, others think that it had not brought any significant changes in humans' life. I strongly agree with the former standpoint since
the
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space
excavation brings many benefits to mankind.
To begin
with,
the
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space
science has revolutionised all walks of our life, especially, day to day activities.
In other words
, when we observe our surroundings, a large number of equipment, which we use today was
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developed to use in
space
-crafts.
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,
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sports shoes
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adopted
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version of the
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,
similarly
, smoke detectors and many more.
Therefore
,
this
technology assists to bring a dramatic positive improvement in the way we live. Another fact is here
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rocket science can help us to resolve potential threats we may face today as well as in future.
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the introduction of satellites,
this
enables to monitor the terrorist activities and control effectively by incorporating other modern facilities.
For instance
, the USA is closely observed countries
such
as- Iran, Syria, Pakistan, and etcetera and if they find any provoking actions, the USA attacks them immediately and bring the safety and security over there. These all possible only because of having the
space
technology and
thus
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how significant its contributions. In conclusion, even though some people think that the outer-
space
findings made a lot of
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developments
development
in humans day-to-day lifestyle, others have an opposite view. In my opinion, I firmly believe that
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countless merits. It is highly recommended that research on the cosmos need to be
further
expanded.
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