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Your friend's dog has recently passed away. Write a letter to console your friend. In your letter: Express your sympathy Include memories you have about the dog Invite your friend to do something with you.

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Dear John, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to empathize with you on the sudden demise of your beloved pet " Casper". I really cannot believe that Casper is not among us as I have met him
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 of days back at your house. In fact, it is a huge loss to you and your family. I can imagine your pain and suffering as you have loved him the most. I could not come to your place because of a few official commitments, but my condolences are with you in
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 grieving time. Let me reminisce
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 time we have spent with Casper. I recall once, when I was playing ball with him
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 your lawn, he was furious and quick at catching up
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 ball. As we all have fond memories
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 him, I would suggest
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 the good old days rather than grieving
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his passing. I want to cheer you up so I have planned a get together
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 at my house. We would start the day off by playing badminton, treat you with barbecue snacks followed by watching your favourite movie Avengers. I am really excited to meet you. Write back soon!
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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