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Some people think that social media websites are a great way to create networks whereas others think that personal meetings are the best means to have a social network. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People have diverging views on social media or the personal meeting for an effective social group of people. Each of them are beneficial upon the circumstances provided,
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,in my opinion, rather than a social network, the personal presence provides us
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ew, Social media has provided us with the capability of a global network of friends. Its efficacy is much broader and even yields us with the global talented circle of friends.
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, Linkedin is a platform of a professional web of friends where a budding engineer have shared one of his model Ferrari car built from scrap and the CEO, Ferrari has even shown his willingness in extending to buy that proposal. Obviously,
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 wouldn't be feasible without the possibility of universal connection offered by the social media platforms. A few others, rather than having a virtual connection prefer personal meetings to build a meaningful relationship. Because, people will be more interactive, attentive and outgoing which enhances their personality.
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, the relationship tends to sustain longer as it is not confiding to virtual reality which will only worsen our socially interactive skill.
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, even with the advent of modern technology to stay globally connected, the recent study says that people with public speaking skills are way lower than in past years. In my opinion, even though the opportunities to build a social chain is limitless, the ultimate understanding of a person's attitude is viable only through a personal meeting. To put in a nutshell, a few people may think the social network is convenient, reliable and potential, where others may believe in the essence of personal connection. Being socially connected will not contribute to how socially approachable a person is unless it is experienced in personal presence.
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