Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people to give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about dangers of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree.
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way
of teaching. While ex-prisoners who became good citizens could be good teachers by transfering
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also
argued that it might not be the best way
of crime
prevention. This
could be just one way
of education
and students should be educated from other resources, like parents, teachers and also
social media, which they are in contact every day anyhow. Thorough
analysis will be conducted reflecting on why lectures of ex-criminals are not the best Add an article
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way
of crime
education
.
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enormously
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in describing their previous life and the Correct your spelling
charismatic
way
of their telling could be inspiring to teenagers who are already in ages when they are more likely to get in risky situations. If these stories are delivered in an ambiguous way
, ex-criminals could even becaome
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become
became
heros
of some group of teenagers. Correct your spelling
heroes
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is obviously non desirable
outcome and consequences of Add a hyphen
non-desirable
this
possible side effect should be seriously taken into account. Curators of these kinds of educational programmes ought to be aware of this
fact and they also
ought to do a fine-grained selection of possible ex-criminal candidates as teachers.
Secondly
, it is of a
paramount importance that family is involved in the process of educating their kids from the early ages of their life. Parents who are leading by positive example, are good role models for their kids in an unambiguous Remove the article
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way
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surrounded
well educated
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well-educated
crime
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has a huge responsibility in Correct your spelling
family
crime
prevention and consequently
it might be even the most important unit of society among those responsible fo
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committing
crime
.
To summarise, it has been disscussed
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discussed
education
aimed to
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preventing
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prevent
crime
. Althought
their real-life experience could Correct your spelling
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potentinally
be useful, it might Correct your spelling
potentially
also
be counterproductive. This
way
of teaching should not be completely abandoned but it might be used as a
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an
education
. Called the most important cell of society with reason, the family should have the main and the most important role in crime
prevention, beside
other, complementary ways of preventions.Replace the word
besides
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