Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people to give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about dangers of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree.

Crime
education
has always been
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mportant part of school
education
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there is a debate going on about the best
way
of teaching. While ex-prisoners who became good citizens could be good teachers by
transfering
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transferring
their real-life experience, it is
also
argued that it might not be the best
way
of
crime
prevention.
This
could be just one
way
of
education
and students should be educated from other resources, like parents, teachers and
also
social media, which they are in contact every day anyhow.
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analysis will be conducted reflecting on why lectures of ex-criminals are not the best
way
of
crime
education
.
Firstly
, it is true that once wrongdoer could become valuable citizens and that their message can create
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ivid example of living life on the other side of
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aw. But
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contrastively
those stories could even be inspiring for young people. For
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instance
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some of
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x-criminals could be
enourmously
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enormously
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charismatic
in describing their previous life and the
way
of their telling could be inspiring to teenagers who are already in ages when they are more likely to get in risky situations. If these stories are delivered in an ambiguous
way
, ex-criminals could even
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become
became
heros
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heroes
of some group of teenagers.
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is obviously
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outcome and consequences of
this
possible side effect should be seriously taken into account. Curators of these kinds of educational programmes ought to be aware of
this
fact and they
also
ought to do a fine-grained selection of possible ex-criminal candidates as teachers.
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, it is of
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paramount importance that family is involved in the process of educating their kids from the early ages of their life. Parents who are leading by positive example, are good role models for their kids in an unambiguous
way
.
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, kids
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surrounded
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parents are less likely to even be in a situation to commit a
crime
. For
this
reason
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it is quite reasonable to state that
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family
has a huge responsibility in
crime
prevention and
consequently
it might be even the most important unit of society among those responsible
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decrising
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decreasing
overall tendency and probability of
commiting
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committing
a
crime
. To summarise, it has been
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discussed
why ex-offenders are not considered the best nor the only source of
education
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crime
.
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Although
their real-life experience could
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potentially
be useful, it might
also
be counterproductive.
This
way
of teaching should not be completely abandoned but it might be used as
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dditional source of
education
. Called the most important cell of society with reason, the family should have the main and the most important role in
crime
prevention,
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other, complementary ways of preventions.
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