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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attension to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
 contemporary era, the world is changing rapidly and dramatically. Nowadays, companies are using various types of platforms for an advertisement to attract people to buy their products. So, some people believe that they are too successful in it, whereas others argue that they are so common that laymen have no longer interest in it. I totally agree with the
first
 view.
First
 and foremost, these days, TVs and internet are flooded with commercials and they play a vital role in
this
 situation. These industries are deeply studied how human behaviour works, when it shows the advertisement, due to
this
 they have taken innovative and creative approaches to attract persons. They tend to lure customers by giving huge discounts. Because of
this
, inhibitions buy
such
 things that are unnecessary for them.
In addition
 to the above, in malls, they, not only give discount coupons but
also
 hold lucky draws and give gifts, which act as a boost.
Also
, when people heard about gifts, they immidetialy buy it no matter what is the price of the product. TV commercials use famous and affluent people for persuading common people because, in my country, people worshipped them as a god.
On the other hand
, nowadays, the commercials are too frequent that the public has no longer attentions.
Moreover
, TV broadcast the same advertisements many times in a day, owing to
this
 viewers get bored and change channels. Sometimes, when viewers are watching some interesting programmes and news,
then
 these commercials act as a setback. To conclude, it is an undeniable fact that they are too successful to persuade people to buy the products. They always find a way how to lure people.
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