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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Climate
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 represents a major threat to life on Earth, but some people argue that we need to accept it rather than try to stop it. I completely disagree with
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 issue and reduce the human impact on the Earth's
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. There are various measures that governments and individuals could take to prevent, or at least mitigate,
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. Governments could introduce laws to limit the carbon dioxide emissions that lead to global warming. They could impose “green taxes” on drivers, airline companies and other polluters, and they could invest in renewable energy production from solar, wind or water power. As individuals, we should
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 try to limit our contribution to
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, by becoming more energy efficient, by flying less, and by using bicycles and public transport.
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, the public can affect the actions of governments by voting for politicians who propose to tackle
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, rather than for those who would prefer to ignore it. If
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 of taking the above measures we simply try to live with
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, I believe that the consequences will be disastrous. To give just one example, I am not optimistic that we would be able to cope with even a small rise in sea levels. Millions of people would be displaced by flooding, particularly in countries that do not have the means to safeguard low-lying areas. These people would lose their homes and their jobs, and they would be forced to migrate to nearby cities or perhaps
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, and I disagree with those who argue that we can find ways to live with it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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