The government should not waste money on arts as the same money would be better spent on p projects like sanitation or infrastructure. Do you agree to this statement

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In these present world, the investment of
government
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have to on
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ood way, the area of investment should be in future help the country to grow. It is disagreed to spent the
money
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in
art
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instead
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of projects
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or invest the same value of
money
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in these two fields. The
government
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sources of income need to
ssess
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assess
in the
roject
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project
that supports the high quality of life, as well as the
art
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is not promising.
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, there
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multiple ways to spent the
money
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to increase economy incomes, the sources of incomes need to possess the time and energy from the
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to result in
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feedback the good return.
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, if the country
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special land with rare
vegtables
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vegetables
grow on it,
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aid by no limitation of
money
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, tools and farmer
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therefore
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to export
this
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product to the whole world
consequently
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the economy will rise
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of
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ight way to invest. The power points and strong chances need to consider to invest to surely get
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positive return.
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, the area of
art
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have
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many
disadvantage
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to spent the
money
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and energy on it , many kinds of
art
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likewise
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music and
threater
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theatre
have the lowest attractive of people due to the artiest work harder than anyone
alse
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else
and get less than what they deserve
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insteance
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instance
, many of people looking in the
art
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as
leuxury
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luxury
and entertainment without taking a serious work so there is no
benifit
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benefit
benefits
behind it,
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the
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another
issues
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is the
musiums
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museums
museum
cost a lot of
money
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with no a huge
benifit
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benefit
in back. The lose of human
resourse
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resource
resources
in
this
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feild
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field
and place to present
this
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sort of
art
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with huge return make
this
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feild
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field
not promising to spent
money
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on it. To sum up, the
government
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have to look for the strong ability and
incourge
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encourage
encouraged
their people to work on it to increase the power of incomes and provide the rich generation in few
next
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years of working harder in
g
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ood source. The spent of
money
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should be in
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ight place and time, in project help to grow the economy
rether
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rather
than
art
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. In conclusion
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the human resources for each region need to by notice and give them the
reseaon
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reason
to be
produtive
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productive
towrd
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toward
thier
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their
the
country to have a worthy dynasty.
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