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You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: • state your reason for writing • describe the problem and your concerns • explain what you would like the Principal to do.

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Dear Sir, I am a participant of Business English course at your college, and now writing to you to express my disappointment about the news of the
cancelation
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 of work placement program. One of the major causes of
admitting
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in
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 your institution is the job placement programme, which is rare in the syllabus of others. I thought that
this
 opportunity of
live
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 apprenticeship in a company will enhance my competencies and add extra value
in
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 my resume.
Moreover
, your training is expensive compared to the others, but I decided to pay extra because of
this
 valuable internship.
However
,
sudden
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 exit decision of
this
 programme is quite unusual, and unacceptable to me as that makes
this
 training extra-ordinary to me. In
this
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 circumstances, I lost my interest to join rest classes.
Therefore
, I request you to re-fund me as the curriculum is quite different
than
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 advertised when we entered. I would like to attend
same
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 subject in
other
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another
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 institution where
live
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 internship is available. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Taslima
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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