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Modern technology is changing our world. This has advantages such as bringing people closer together through communication. It also has disadvantages such as destroying the differences between cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Our world has been changed enormously by modern
technology
. Where the different modes of communication brought people closer to each other,
technology
 is destroying the cultural differences as well.
However
, I believe that there are more positives than negatives that
technology
 can bring. I will explain both in the following paragraphs. There are a plethora of advantages of
technology
.
Firstly
, learning has become very convenient through it. People who have any disability, or not allowed to go out from their homes, can now easily gain knowledge about several fields, just on one click.
Nevertheless
, it keeps the works running. In
this
 Covid situation
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if the factories were closed and would not use
technology
 to operate, we were sure to die with hunger. If the work would stop,
then
 the countries would fall with a very critical condition, but
technology
 keeps everybody alive. As where is light, there is dark as well;
similarly
,
technology
 has some disadvantages if used by the culprit mind people. The misuse of
technology
 can be disastrous.
For example
, it can be used for making atomic bombs and/or fatal viruses that
has
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 the ability to finish
w
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hole human breed. To conclude,
technology
 Is made to brighten our future, if it will be used for
this
 purpose only
then
 there is no question regarding its advantages and disadvantages for us; but if it goes in wrong hands of evil-minded people,
then
 there is no solution for that as well.
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