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Nowadays most green energy is becoming ever more prevalent in both developed and developing countries. Some argue they greatly reduce costs and are better for the environment, others believe they are a serious threat to energy security. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Protecting nature is vital to environmental balance. Nowadays, nations committed to sustainability are using more renewable
energy
 than ever before since it contributes to the preservation of the environment and
also
 may be economically viable.
However
, some leaders argue that green
energy
 could undermine (implicate) the reliability of the global
energy
 supply
as a result
 of its dependency on climate.
This
 essay will discuss both views, but personally, I believe that renewable sources of
energy
 are the future. On the one hand, there is a concern in most developed and developing countries that green
energy
 has supply chain risks.
This
 is the fact that it may largely depend on unreliable conditions
such
 as wind, wave and rain, which are clean source are of power
energy
 and largely depend on weather conditions.
This
 concern has increased due to world climate changes and can be a serious threat to
energy
 security if the nation depends only on
this
 type of
energy
.
On the other hand
, fossil fuels are a larger threat to
energy
 security since they are certainly finite in quantity, whereas renewable
energy
 is effectively infinite. One day the earth’s oil can full out, there will be no
energy
 security without green
energy
 technologies.
Furthermore
, problems of unpredictability can be mitigated by improving battery technologies, building more renewable
energy
 generators (to increase supply during ideal conditions) and improving current technologies (to increase efficiency),
such
 as in the moving solar panel example. In conclusion, despite the green
energy
 is likely to risk dependent on weather conditions, I believe that it can be installed with a minimum amount and there are no threats to our environment.
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