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Certain parents believe that good parenting means constantly being involved in the lives of their children. While some parents believe it is better for the development of their children if they learn to deal with situations by themselves. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Parents are the pillars of strength for their children .Some believe that to be
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parent
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, one must spend multitude time with their young ones while I concur with some who have the opinion off springs independently needs to face challenges of their lives in order to succeed. The following essay will explain the importance of parents care at
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oung age and how independent children taste victory. Children come into
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ensure they spent quality time with their
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 as in the early stages of childhood, love and support of a
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 is crucial. Its
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 duty to categorize good among bad to their little ones.
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, when a
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 teaches a
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 each
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 in
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 earth is valuable, he won’t intend to harm a bee or hurt a cat.
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, parents can
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 encourage their children to do certain tasks under their supervision which in turn makes the
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 courageous to perform likely task in future . A person
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 respected as an individual, he will feel worthy to prove himself. When a
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 keeps on
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 a
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 even when he is an adult, he won’t take any action of his own and will always think parents would be there to safeguard whole his
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.
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, if a
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 is allowed to handle his problems independently, he may commit certain mistakes whereas he will learn
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 lessons from it.
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, a teenager chooses his friends wisely if he had negatives effects from previous companions.
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 of all, he would
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 be considered for his opinions. A
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 who is pampered by his parents doesn’t have a word of his own for any subject while an independent
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 always has a stand and makes it clear he would be able
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urvive through the decision he had taken. In conclusion, parents do play an important role in
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hild’s
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 mainly at his young age by nurturing him with
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ssential lesson. But a
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 succeeds in
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 only when he is considered as an individual and allowed to live his
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 in his own manner.

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