The three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular school in 1981, 1991, and 2001.
The diagrams compare the expenditure of the school in 1981, 1991, and 2001.
Overall
, the components were divided into several parts which are salaries
, resources, and insurances
.
Fix the agreement mistake
insurance
Firstly
, the salaries
were the greatest proportion over 20 years, and this
have
included both teachers' and other workers' Unnecessary verb
apply
salaries
. By 1991, the amount
of Change the quantifier
number
salaries
reached up to 72% which was more than half of all spending at that time. Secondly
, the spending of
Change preposition
on
the
resources Correct article usage
apply
were fluctuated
between 1981 and 2001. Change to the active voice
fluctuated
According to
the charts, non-human resources held 30% of all expenditure
. Fix the agreement mistake
expenditures
However
, in 1991, the cost of resorces
began to decrease to 25%, and it Correct your spelling
resources
had
increased again after a decade. Unnecessary verb
apply
Lastly
, insurance, the smallest part of the spending, had Correct article usage
a slightly
slightly
Change the word
slight
increase
every 10 years. It Change the verb form
increased
was
started at 2% and Unnecessary verb
apply
increase
to 3% and 8% in 1981, 1991, and 2001 respectively.
In summary, there were various differences Wrong verb form
increased
of
expenditure proportion between 1981 and 2001. Change preposition
in
However
, the salaries
were the largest cost to the school of all time.Submitted by fahsai on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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