The three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular school in 1981, 1991, and 2001.

The three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular school in 1981, 1991, and 2001.
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The diagrams compare the expenditure of the school in 1981, 1991, and 2001.
Overall
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, the components were divided into several parts which are
salaries
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, resources, and
insurances
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insurance
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.
Firstly
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, the
salaries
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were the greatest proportion over 20 years, and
this
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have
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included both teachers' and other workers'
salaries
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. By 1991, the
amount
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of
salaries
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reached up to 72% which was more than half of all spending at that time.
Secondly
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, the spending
of
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on
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the
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apply
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resources
were fluctuated
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between 1981 and 2001.
According to
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the charts, non-human resources held 30% of all
expenditure
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expenditures
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.
However
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, in 1991, the cost of
resorces
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resources
began to decrease to 25%, and it
had
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increased again after a decade.
Lastly
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, insurance, the smallest part of the spending, had
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a slightly
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slightly
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increase
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increased
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every 10 years. It
was
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started at 2% and
increase
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increased
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to 3% and 8% in 1981, 1991, and 2001 respectively. In summary, there were various differences
of
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in
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expenditure proportion between 1981 and 2001.
However
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, the
salaries
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were the largest cost to the school of all time.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual spending
  • budget allocation
  • educational expenses
  • financial distribution
  • percentage
  • increase/decrease in spending
  • significant change
  • expenditures
  • comparison
  • trend
  • category
  • shift
  • saw a rise/fall
  • investment
  • allocation
  • predominant
  • minor
  • resources
  • prioritize
  • fiscal policy
  • capital outlay
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