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Is it good for children to start using computers from an early age and spend long hours on them? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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With the advent of the internet, computers have become widely used throughout the world. Children are no exception to
this
. With the ever-growing usage among the younger generation over the
last
 decade, both benefits and drawbacks should be considered. Access to information, ability to enhance coding skills are the strong motivators of its benefits while unwanted distractions, optometry diseases are the strong detractors of
this
 phenomenon.
To begin
 with, one has access to endless information, which is the primary source of enhancing a skillset. If that happens from an early age, what else is required to be grateful to? To illustrate, from the survey conducted by the New York Child learning association, 60% of the young software developers admitted that spent long hours of online games during their childhood.
Thus
, it is witnessing spending long with technology can be beneficial.
Moreover
, today we are witnessing many young coders that aid students stand out from
such
 an early age.
On the other hand
, it is highly possible for the young to get distracted, especially during their online project submissions.
This
 is a serious problem to be considered and has detrimental effects on student life.
For example
, recently CBC News published the rate of failures among students has been trending down with the ever-increasing online classes.
Thus
, as in everything else, disadvantages need to be pondered as well.
Furthermore
, we notice children using glasses due to their increased screen time is another shortfall of
this
. All in all, it is evident that exposure to electronic devices will have both positive and counteractive impact on a child. If any future innovative technologies help to minimize the drawbacks, the merits of
this
 will be enormous.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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