IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

You share a parking area with several neighbours and have recently started having problems. Write a letter to be copied to all neighbours that share the parking area. In that letter • explaining the problems • suggesting ways to help the situation • proposing a possible meeting You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Neighbours,

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Dear Neighbours, I am Z.M. the owner of flat number 18. I am writing to express my concern related to our parking space.
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 with, some of the residents do not pay attention
of
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 safety
matter
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 in our shared parking space. To illustrate more , when they leave the parking lot, they do not wait for the door to close,
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consequently
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 there is a risk that strangers enter
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the building.
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, some residents use two parking slots,
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, other people will not find a vacancy ,if they come later than others. Considering
above
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 mentioned, I would like to suggest
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 and
define
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 some rules and
regulation
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 to observe other’s
right
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rights
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 and ensure the security of the shared area. So I appreciate it if you come to the parking on
the
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next Sunday at 6:00 PM to discuss
about
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possible issues and solutions. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, ZM

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coherence cohesion
Your ideas are clearly organized with a coherent structure. However, ensure that each paragraph conveys a single idea clearly before moving to the next one.
coherence cohesion
To score higher, you can vary your sentence structure more and ensure that the transition between ideas is very fluid.
task achievement
Your letter addresses all parts of the task effectively. To improve, you could provide more specific suggestions or examples to strengthen your response.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are suitable and polite, reflecting an appropriate tone for the letter.
task achievement
You have completed the required task effectively by explaining the problems, suggesting solutions, and proposing a meeting.
task achievement
The tone of your letter is suitable and respectful, which is important for maintaining good relations with your neighbors.
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