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These days some people spend a lot of money on tickets to go to sporting or  events. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Spending hard-earned wages on attending expensive football, rugby and baseball matches is a matter of concern to many.
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 critics argue that
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 is misusing of precious funds, I personally believe the opposite. The social and health benefits are the strong motivators to prove the thesis statement true.
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, one can reduce their stress levels enormously by attending their favourite shows.
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, the cultural or sporting events act as platforms for socializing and networking. To illustrate, a study by Harvard Business School shown that top executives from fortune 500 companies had invested in tickets of basketball games not only for themselves
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 but for their clients to seek distraction and amusement while entertaining and nurturing future business contacts.
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 corporates and event-organizers exacerbate the ticket prices with sky-high budgets, undoubtedly, there are health and business benefits.
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, if money is not the objective,
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 there is overwhelming evidence that attending sporting events, concerts are a way of investing in experience, which has become a growing trend that can be appreciated. The ability to build fond and durable memories which
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 a lifetime and become part of a family's history. An example of
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 was a mythical Woodstock festival held in 1989, which was a peaceful milestone witnessed by thousands of people who afforded it.
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 events cannot be overstated. To conclude from the aforementioned arguments, it is evident that it is worth investing in the experiences over material properties. Despite the frequent prohibitive high prices, I firmly believe that it is justifiable to participate in watching and exuberating the sport and cultural fests with the benefits it brings in to many.
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