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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

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Convenience stores sell all kinds of
product
such
 as vegetables, fruits , dairy products and canned
food
 which are mostly imported , rather than the products from their own
country
.There are some pros and cons of
this
 which I will discuss in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, the prominent benefits is to the developing countries which sell their
product
 in developed countries and create a kind profit that indirectly contributes to the economy of the
country
.
For Example
 a number of products like snakes , canned
food
 imports from India to the different countries of the world.
Secondly
 , if the demand for import
product
 is high
then
 a
country
 who is importing that
product
 needs to grow more ,which creates an opportunity for the employment the people of that
country
. On the flip side ,
Although
 there are some cons , we can neglect the cons of importing system.
First
 of all, the disappearance of local
food
 because supermarkets provide various kinds of
product
, which are produced in foreign countries.
For example
, Grocery stores import all the
food
 from another
country
 and some of them are canned
food
, which is different from their local
food
, so youngsters like to consume prepared
food
 as they do not have time to make meals.
Moreover
 , They forgot their traditional
food
 and
also
 even do not know how to cook which can become the reason behind the extinction of any culture in the future. Overall ,
i
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 think the relation and bond between the countries will get more strong if we do import which leads to the development of any countries.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
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